Yami Mirai
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Post by Yami Mirai on Dec 26, 2005 13:40:56 GMT -4
Well, I started up a franchise of my own. I've got the first chapter of their first fanfic posted over at Fanfiction.net Here's a quick link to it: www.fanfiction.net/s/2720951/1/Please tell me what you think of it. Do I need to make any changes? Should I continue this? Or should I just give up as a writer and become a hermit for the rest of my life? Thanks. ;D
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Post by SuperStantzio on Dec 26, 2005 14:18:36 GMT -4
That is very good! I'm looking more to read from you. Keep the good work and you're great writer. Farah
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Post by Yami Mirai on Dec 26, 2005 14:24:56 GMT -4
That is very good! I'm looking more to read from you. Keep the good work and you're great writer. Farah ;D Why thank you! I've got the next three days off from work; I'll work on the second chapter then. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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Post by SuperStantzio on Dec 26, 2005 15:26:11 GMT -4
;DYou are very welcome! ;D
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Post by CJ on Dec 26, 2005 17:35:16 GMT -4
It's probably me, but I found it funny that there's a character named DJ there...
Great story though. You should probably read some of my stuff if you want stories with no action XD
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Yami Mirai
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Post by Yami Mirai on Dec 26, 2005 22:55:26 GMT -4
It's probably me, but I found it funny that there's a character named DJ there... Great story though. You should probably read some of my stuff if you want stories with no action XD lol! Figures CJ would notice the name DJ. XD It's because I named him Duncan Joseph and then decided he wouldn't be too fond of that name so he would go by DJ instead. Of course, his sister's initials spell out "cat", so what does that tell you about my naming process? I'll check your stories out. And thanks for the compliment!
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Post by Fritz on Dec 29, 2005 10:03:07 GMT -4
Interesting beginning. Not much of any supernatural nature yet...but with the famous New York Ghostbusters coming to town, I guess it will be forthcoming.
I really can't say anybody's made a deep impression yet, but there are some fun jokes in there (ie the Harry Potter gags)
I'll at least give it a chance.
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Yami Mirai
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Post by Yami Mirai on Dec 29, 2005 13:42:52 GMT -4
Thanks, that's all I ask. As for the supernatural, that makes an appearance in the second chapter. The New York GBs will certainly have their hands full dealing with it.
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Yami Mirai
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Post by Yami Mirai on Jan 5, 2006 20:32:25 GMT -4
www.fanfiction.net/s/2720951/2/The second chapter's here, folks! The guys finally get some ghostbusting action which leads them to investigate the cause, and the newbies have ghostly encounters of their own...
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Post by EGBFan on Jan 12, 2006 8:59:12 GMT -4
Ok, after making a load of excuses about why I hadn't read this in the thread about Louis, I realised I had nothing particular to do for the next hour - so I finally read it. The beginning was an attention grabber. Oddly enough, Crystal seems to have things in common with me. She's uncertain about her future, as am I, just now. I also worked with children for a few years in my teens. It wasn't a full-time job, and they were a bit further along in their school career than daycare, and I enjoyed it (most of the time), but anyway, it's something. And I went to see Harry Potter and the Goblet of Fire with my brother. I don't love Harry Potter and he doesn't hate it - we're both more in the middle - so it's not close enough to be a freaky coincidence. Just a small one. Yeah, anyway. The computer game stuff kind of went over my head, but it's good characterisation - using actions, dialogue and internal dialogue rather than stating the obvious with something like, "Mileena was very into computer games." I like a story with a lot of dialogue that doesn't get bogged down into explanations. It's good.
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Yami Mirai
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Post by Yami Mirai on Jan 12, 2006 12:01:23 GMT -4
Ok, after making a load of excuses about why I hadn't read this in the thread about Louis, I realised I had nothing particular to do for the next hour - so I finally read it. The beginning was an attention grabber. Oddly enough, Crystal seems to have things in common with me. She's uncertain about her future, as am I, just now. I also worked with children for a few years in my teens. It wasn't a full-time job, and they were a bit further along in their school career than daycare, and I enjoyed it (most of the time), but anyway, it's something. And I went to see Harry Potter and the Goblet of Fire with my brother. I don't love Harry Potter and he doesn't hate it - we're both more in the middle - so it's not close enough to be a freaky coincidence. Just a small one. That is an interesting coincidence. Are you and your brother twins? Crystal and DJ are, and if you two are as well it's going to be even weirder. Thanks! ;D For the video game part, that was actually what I went through while playing Legend of Zelda: Majora's Mask, almost word-for-word. Later, after I had taken a break from playing and started working on the fic, I realized that it would probably have been funny to an outsider watching me play, so I included it as a scene for her.
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