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Post by ghostdiva on Mar 14, 2006 15:50:25 GMT -4
This plot is so good. I really like this story, so much mystery. Its very exctiing really. You hit upon a lot of stuff that makes a story intriging, lying relatives, regret, premonitions, instinct. Awesome. And it has Toad Island, one of my favorite, NOW stories.
Can't wait to see more ghostdiva
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Post by Fritz on Mar 14, 2006 17:27:31 GMT -4
Toad Island came into it kind of late--the basic idea of Chelsea disappearing was one I'd floated around two years ago, when Ludicris was still running the team. It was going to be contribution to a series of stories he wanted everyone to do sort of spotlighting their own characters. My Real Life situation and the decisions to revamp the team ( Act Two) formed more of the story...but I was stuck until, in all honesty, I had a dream about trying to find the Real Life person Chelsea's based off of in a creepy amusement park. It brought to mind Toad Island, Dagon, and thus, the rest of the story fell into place. Thank you all for your kind words.
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Post by Kingpin on Mar 15, 2006 6:07:52 GMT -4
That reminded me, I was a little torn on the 'familiar threesome' that appeared in the story at Toad Island... I wasn't sure if they came off a little strongly and a little too obvious.
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Post by Fritz on Mar 15, 2006 9:40:47 GMT -4
That reminded me, I was a little torn on the 'familiar threesome' that appeared in the story at Toad Island... I wasn't sure if they came off a little strongly and a little too obvious. That was something that just sort of came up as I was writing it. Maybe it was a little corny, but thte voices in my head said "Go for it!!!" And if I don't listen to them they shout at me.
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Post by EGBFan on Mar 15, 2006 10:42:23 GMT -4
As I'm fond of saying, I already commented by e-mail. I basically said this story is intriguing and I didn't see the twist coming and, um, good work. That sounds really stagnant... I've had a hectic morning, sorry. You know I liked it.
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Post by Miss Janine on Mar 15, 2006 10:48:19 GMT -4
I just have the feeling that when Fritz and his friends find whoever's behind this, there's gonna be a big can of whoop@$$ opened up! I loved the bit with Bo and the "massive deuce". Reminds me of recent events over at GBHQ... As always, great stuff! I was a bit confused at first with the vision at the very beginning, but it made sense later. And I don't know why, but I think Jen may be a bit off with her thoughts about Egon and the "gift". Maybe it's just the way I read it. (Darn lucky to even get time TO read it, RL has been impossible lately! ) btw, how many parts is this going to be?
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Post by Fritz on Mar 15, 2006 10:54:23 GMT -4
I'm not completely sure yet. If I can wrap it up in Part 3 without it feeling rushed, I'll try to do so.
If Part 3 runs a little longer than usual, that might be okay. But if it starts to run really really long it may run to Part 4.
But for the moment I'm probably going to concentrate on "Gemini Rising, Part 1" and something I've been working on for Bo Holbrook. So it may be a little while before this story continues...
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Post by Miss Janine on Mar 15, 2006 13:50:00 GMT -4
Cool!
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Post by Kingpin on Mar 15, 2006 14:09:25 GMT -4
We must always indulge the mad, disembodied voices in our heads. Indulge them, or they get angry. And when they get angry... PEOPLE DIE!!! Ahem. Sorry.
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Post by SuperStantzio on Mar 16, 2006 15:04:16 GMT -4
This is a wonderful story I'm enjoy reading so much. Keep up the good work!
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Post by Fritz on Jun 13, 2006 9:29:03 GMT -4
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Post by ghostdiva on Jun 14, 2006 17:12:10 GMT -4
Fritz, this plot is awesome! I really, really wish I had my issue of this comic with me. I want to re-read it so bad right now.
I congratulate you on being able to take this story and customize it into an even more sinister plot. I loved that you incorporated research into it with the book section and that you are able to turn something very personal to you into such an enthralling story. I was always very surprised that this comic issue was so grown up in plot design, not many children’s publications had people being kidnapped and forced to mate with inhuman creatures, it was a good choice to use in telling your GB version of something that happened to you in real life. Kudos. ghostdiva
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Post by Miss Janine on Jun 14, 2006 17:34:55 GMT -4
I've been wondering how you were able to write about something that has had such an effect on you, even a fictionalized account. The only reason I can come up with is that you're just so damn good. And I gotta admit, it's REALLY got me riveted. I actually have some respect for Bo's character, too.
And now everything makes a LOT more sense!
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Post by Fritz on Jun 22, 2006 10:13:17 GMT -4
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Post by Miss Janine on Jun 22, 2006 10:44:04 GMT -4
Cool!
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